Sunday, October 15, 2006
Her Honour I Stripped...
“Come, ill set you free”
Called out a whisper to me.
I heard a wailing scream,
I perceived it to be no dream.
Beads of fear on my forehead,
I did not dare leave my bed.
Shivers running down my spine,
I vision her dead body so supine.
To me, the banshee calls out,
“Death is near, no doubt.”
As I see her spectral face clear,
My dark heart fills with fear.
I see my dark deeds,
Filling my mind.
Time
I cannot rewind.
She screeches in anger
About her broken trust
And of how I thrust
My dagger inside her
She spurted black blood,
In a torrent, in a flood
With a malice so pure,
To make sure
I plunged it so yet again,
Her senses she’d never regain.
The beautiful ghoul
Has come to take my soul
My body she will burn
My soul she will churn
At the Gates of Netherworld.
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28 comments:
Fabulously written... i could visualise the scene
nightmares **Shudder**
@ aditi:
thankie thankie!
wrote this one a long time back and wasnt sure whether it was good enough!
:-)
very graphic - wow!
Keshi.
@ keshi:
thanks!
i must say, u express yourself very nicely!
@appu:
hey thanks!
:)
Oh my gawd!!
..
that is DARK!!
Very very cool and well written!
@ alter abhi:
yes its dark. maybe u cud open the curtains or switch on the lights!
;-)
:P
@shakhi:
thanks for dropping by!
:)
@sanjay:
thank yew!
:)
Freedom comes with darkness
Like a nector and a thorn
let her take existence
I live beyond dreams.
Ahh its Dark but honest .
Is this fear or surrender???
@ hazel dream:
wat does it look like to u?
its dark but not honest, yet not dishonest.
its imagination. mine.
its Fear. but that of the perpetrator.
its surrender. but again that of the wrong-doer.
its revenge. of the one that has been wronged.
PS: ur four lines were in reference to ?
"Freedom comes with darkness
Like a nector and a thorn
let her take existence
I live beyond dreams."
er ... I have a feelign I will hve to read that poem many a times .. found a bit complex (as always, thats my story with poems :-D )
@ anshuman:
lol..
i used to hav the same kinda story analysing poems!
ill analyse it for u if ur repeated attempts, if there are any, at understanding this poem fail!
:)
i thght yu did it to free ur soul frm her!!
wonderful....
straight from heart...
They were in reference to your poem ..
Its another perspective
Optimistic One .
EEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEK!!!!!!!!!
I think I've started a revolution here.... Of creative writing. might as well not take all the credit, or else I'll be getting more brickbats than I invited :p
BAbe!!! You write real well. Keep it up girrrrl!!!
@ wheatie:
excuse me?!?!
*gives wide-eyed dumbstruck look*
thanks babe!
:)
nice one trinnie ... rhyming scheme n all .. nice
confusing! confusing! now yu r a girl(i thght oderwise frm da poem) but this poem , to me, sounds more like frm a guy!
oh..well.. it does also sound like a case of betrayall between 2 women...hmmm... is it? or ryu playing a guy's role? i dunno...my brain has been dead for smtime... xcuse it...
@shama n diya:
yea...playin with the imagery..!
:)
@shruti:
thanx!
@hazel dream:
hmm...pondering over it.
tho i dont understand where the last line fits in...
@elfie:
thanks dear!
but havnt poems always had a rhyme scheme?
:)
@nadim:
the poem is a man's point of view.
it is the thought process of a rapist as he sees his victim's ghost come to claim his life!
;-)
oh! dumb me!!! i didnt read da title!!! :-o
oooh. it's interesting... it sounds like a monologue in a play... i can just imagine it... an evil man, clad in dark robes, with a dark red spotlight on him (and strobe lighting), and the rest of the stage on blackout... standing near the front of the stage with malicious eyes roaming hither and thither... and a crystal clear loud voice entracing the audience... shouting the words out as wildly, fiercely and violently as you have penned them down... with roars of the thunder in the background...
lovely!
:)
@o anonymous reader a.k.a sunrise:
i must say, im quite amused to read ur take and interpretation on this lil poetic piece o' mine!
;-)
thanks gurl!
I see the work of a mind whose imagination is gifted with the art of a painter. you have replicated your thoughts into words....very descriptive, very lifefull. even the murkiest of detail is done with pictoral words.
@amrita:
er...thanks!
and thats quite a beautifully thought up comment that u hav keyed in over here!!
:-)
LOL!!! tee hee, was feeling a lil melodramatic... welcome! ;)
a bit outta place but
HAPPY DIWALI
This is good, it's interesting how you managed to compose verse about that perspective and made it sound credible. I likey:)
awesome
is it Multiple Personality(i refuse to believ it a disorder)...?
or well... its my peception...
= rich
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